The moon was almost completely hidden when Arianna walked outside, the cloud cover blotting what few stars remained. Rain lingered on the air, carrying the promise of a brewing storm. The wind scattered the hair around her face and sent the long tails of Caleb’s coat flapping back from his legs.
“I don’t like the weather,” he muttered to Wyn. He offered Arianna his hand and guided her down the steps. She smiled, unable to remember when a man had last shown her such elegant courtesy.
Beautiful six. I can feel the storm approaching in the first paragraph and the emotion in the last line of the second. Nice!
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Thanks so much, Ursula. My first Six of many I hope to add. It’s pulled from my upcoming paranormal “Weathering Rock” being released by Lyrical Press in October. Thanks for visiting my blog and commenting!
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Welcome to SSS! Loved her reaction to him holding her hand; elegant courtesy indeed!
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Thanks, Angela. And I’m happy to be part of SSS. Looking forward to doing many more!
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Nice job! I could picture the approaching storm.
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Thanks, Elaine! I’m glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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I really like the mood you evoke in this. Well done!
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Thanks so much, Vivien. I love using description to evoke mood!
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Great description of the setting! I enjoyed her reaction to being offered his hand. 🙂
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Hi, Lorraine. Many thanks. I do like that chivalry-isn’t-dead thing! 🙂
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Great description–I could feel the storm’s approach and especially like Caleb’s coat flapping against his legs. Good detail. Is the storm a warning of turbulent things to come?
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Hi. Sandy. Thanks for commenting. Yes, the storm (or ball lightning more specifically) is a key element to the story. This was my first SSS and I really enjoyed doing it!
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What a great way to put it…”elegant courtesy”. Sadly, it is one of those things that is missing more and more frequently as we become more “modernized”.
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I love a guy that can combine ruggedness and gentility in equal measure. Maybe I just like a chameleon, LOL.
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